Never Realized How Important “You” is

I’m still trudging my way through Mist, though I’m starting to recover from my November push. But going slow has made me overly aware of how hard to handle the speech quirk of one of the main characters is. I figured omitting “you” would be unique enough and provide a few awkward situations. It fits with his background and all, but some sentences get so awkward or roundabout that I’m likely to drop it come revision. Shame. When it works, it does the job well, but I’m not sure it’s worth the hassle.

In comparison, the protagonist trying to communicate in a variation of a language he hasn’t heard or spoken since childhood has a far better payout and creates world depth at the same time. I really need to make a list of the “foreign” terms I used and what they mean before I start getting them confused

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Guess I Don’t Get to Own a Working Mouse

After going through about three wireless mice this year (all suffering from malfunctioning wheels), I caved and bought a wired one a few months ago. And, thanks to me getting caught on the cable at least once a day, it lasted even shorter. On Saturday evening, it  split along the seams. It can’t click anymore, but the wheel still works… Good thing, I kept all the wireless ones. So, now  I’m being stubborn and using two mice: One that can’t click and one that can’t scroll. I’ll get sick of it eventually, but until then, this works.

On the writing front, I’m still working my way out of the post-November funk, but Mist is coming along nicely. My villains are actually behaving the part for once. That’s a massive victory right there. I did ditch a lot of what I wrote during NaNo because it no longer fit the story

Of Half-told Stories and Glaring Mistakes

While Mist still holds the majority of my attention, I’ve also been trying to come up with a more gripping blurb for What Lies Within. I failed, but it made me realize that WLW starts in the middle of the story rather than at the beginning. It should have started with Ash learning of the house’s imminent demolition and his decision to go there before it’s too late, not with him already there.

Not really sure what to do with that. A rewrite would turn it into a completely different, though deeper, story, but I’m not sure it’s worth doing. I might just write Ash Manor of as my “training wheels” series. At least I got a lot of time to decide. I’m not touching anything else until the first draft of Mist is done.

On a happier note, the “forced” NaNo break on  No Such Thing allowed me to realize that there’s a massive consistency error right on the first page.

The main character is lost deep inside a cave and carries that world’s version of a gaslamp. The lamp has been out of fuel for hours, yet, when he drops it, he sees the shards scatter. A little later, he also sees a path branch off from the main path.

I guess, distance really helps.